First Semester Reflection- Piece I'd Like To Revise

The story is called, Lonely Boy, its a short story I used for 2 of my half pages. Its about a boy with no real friends and is really shy, and he makes a friend in the end until a unfortunate event happens. My ideas didn't really come from anywhere. I was just sitting in ym bed and since I'm random I wrote about a lonely boy. I was just hurrying to get it done, so I edited it alot, and I also changed a couple sentences.

Lonely Boy

There was once a onely boy named John. He always sat in the back of the class, and had two friends, his mom and dad. He always got picked on by the bullies, but didn't do anything about it. He's 13 and he has never been to a sleepover and the only birthday parties he has been too are his families. He had a friend in the 3rd grade, but he moved to Michigan. One day he built up the courage to talk to someone, or something.

He met a cardboard cutout named Brian. Brian and John hung out all the time. They "tried" to play football, but Brian was to lazy to catch the ball, or to even move. They also tried to watch movies but Brian's voice recording kept saying the same thing over and over again, and didn't shut off. They were best of friends until Brian died of a rip...